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my narrative..revision October 8, 2009

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As the generations pass technology becomes more advanced, there is more electronics being brought up with a simple way of working them. In today’s society technology has become a bigger use of the everyday life. One can’t go on without their cell phones or Bluetooth and computers. In my personal life technology wasn’t always a big need.  it has become so advanced that many have  the need t always have an electronic in hand. it has become to many a necesity rather than just a luxury. I was able to be one of those people who i didnt need to have all of those things, because to me it wasn’t as important. to me it was just a way to stay in touch or in case of an emergency.as time went by and i got older i started looking at everything in a different way. Now i seem to have a problem when i go somewhere  without my cell phone and  for a while I wasn’t hooked on it, if i didnt have it i felt like if there was something missing and i needed it. Then the day came when I had to go to college and that necessity became stronger for me. My cell phone has become  something that I use all the time and that i have to have at all times. Another object has become very important to me is my laptop. it is something that i need to have with me whenever i go somewhere were i know im going to be able to have internet. technology can reach us in many different ways, it can become more of our lives little by little with out us even  knowing.

 Moving away and going to college has definitely become a big step to me using technology a lot more. I started using my laptop everyday especially because most of my classes require me to use the internet and type papers. I use my laptop almost every day of the week and it has become a must have and must use all the time. I also have to check my e-mail for anything that a professor has put up or anything that has to do with or without school. I also use it more because I chat with my friends from back home that I have not seen in a while. It is a big help to stay in touch and to know what is going on and I wouldn’t be able to do that if I didn’t have my laptop. I have the need that if i travel somewhere, i have to take it with me. i constantly have to be checking everything, but these are not the only reasons for my laptop; i also type a lot, its almost like having a journal in my laptop. i also use it for music and for games.laptops in today’s society have become very popular. People all over the world have found a good use of having a laptop. the fact that it is portable and you could take care of business and other important things away from an office or home. In the other hand my laptop has not been the only resource that I use to stay in touch I also have a mobile phone.

My cell phone at the beginning was not a big deal, I was able to not look at it or be on it for a good while. What I would do is that I would leave it in my room, close the door and leave. It felt like if I had more time with my family or to do other things around the house or outside. Now that I am out of my house and far from my home I like to keep in touch and well I have to talk to my parents and siblings. To be honest I am on my cell phone all the time. I text a lot more than I ever have and I have never talked on the phone so much. I need to keep in touch with my mom, especially her; I need to talk to her about anything that is happening around me or what I’m going through. It is amazing how much I have changed when it comes to technology; I have never thought that I would be one of those people who were in need of their electronics. I think that sooner or later people see how much they just can’t go on with out technology. As of today I cannot get away from my cell phone because I’m worried that someone from back home is going to call me with an emergency and I worry that I’m going to miss the call. Cell phones have become the biggest part of today’s society. It would be very aukward to not see someone that doesnt have a cell phone just for the fact that almost everyone has one, even ten year old kids have cell phones, now. It has becoe such a luxury that it is hard to not have the new coolest phone out there. it doesn’t even matter how expensive it is, that person will find a way to pay for it.Even though, I am using technology in a good matter it also has its effects.

I am able to control the usage of my cell phone most of the time, but when things get boring and I don’t have anything else to do that’s when my phone comes in handy to me.The effects of having this device is that when one is driving, we tend to put more attention at the cell phone than at the road. When this starts to happen society starts to have more problems becasue people get hurt. if the phone rings and we cant find it we have to keep looking for it wen it is simple to just let the call go. In the united states they have had to band texting and talking on the cell phone while driving. It has become such a distraction to many people who it had to be a law to be enforced. Not only can technology be a distraction in a car but also during class or work. We are always wanting to be updated on everything and not looking at our electronics makes it very difficult. Students are not able to concentrate in class because they are so busy texting. and for this reason the abandonment of this source has been approved.

Technology has its ups and downs. overall it has been a great way to get things done faster and to communicate with those far and close to us. Lets just not forget what it really is for and not make it to the point were we have to live on it to be able to survive. I dont think the one should be depended on electronics and other sorts of technology. it has made us see and exprince the bad side to being on the cell phone while driving and the distraction of texting during class. These are things that we have to notice and see for ourselves that it is a very effective way to get distracted. technology is somethig that we need to be able to need when neccessary, but it shouldn’t have to be a luxury.

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3 Responses to “my narrative..revision”

  1. maiarosales Says:

    I think that you made good points in all of your paragraphs. You can most definitely elaborate a little more and give more detail to make your piece longer. But all in all it was well written.

  2. jramos2 Says:

    to my revision i added more things about technology.
    i also redid the introduction because it wasn’t really going the way i planned it to be, so i thought of just redoing it and adding things to make it into a real intro. throught out the essay i added more information because my first essay was lacking the facts and examples that i should have.

    question:
    what do you think i need to work on?
    what is my essay in need of?
    what do you think i can add?

  3. vquezada Says:

    I really liked your essay! it kept me interested at all times with great detail why the things you chose was so important!!!
    Its and enjoyable essay because i can easily relate to you. The transitions were awesome and the order you had in your essay. Really good!!!!!


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